My first time without love
I remember with sadness the day in which my heart broke in a million fragments by the fault of a woman. A woman as beautiful as the shine of the moon in summer nights. This woman came to my life in the right moment, the moment in which my life was falling apart, a moment in which the last ray of hope that left in my soul was on the verge of extinction. At that moment I felt that God and all his court of divinities loved me more than any other human being in this planet since a woman so beautiful being atracted by such a common and normal guy like me does not happen every day, and that saying that we all deserve the best things is not always fulfilled.
This woman spent with me the best things in my life. She gave me a motive for smiling again and to find some sense in this frivolous and often cruel life, this life where we all want more and more because what we have is never enough. She was the main protagonist in my life until the moment arrived in which she said that she did not know what was exactly what she was feeling for me, that her heart was confused and full of doubts, that she needed time to think and apparently she need too much time because until this day I have not known anything about her.
My first time without love
1. Steps to be left without love:
2. The first thing is to find a woman who could break your heart in millions of fragments.
3. That you could not forget that woman because she is as beautiful as the moon in summer nights.
4. To think that thanks to her the lost hope was found again.
5. That you feel that you won a prize for being able to be with a woman so beautiful who normally would not be with a common guy.
6. That this woman be almost perfect and share the best moments in the life with you.
7. That she be the motive for smiling every morning and to find sense to this frivolous and cruel life.
8. That she in the best moment gets confused and asks you a time to think.
9. That the time that she takes to think be so long that you never see her again.
Dear Zamarcando: I'm impressed. Excelent work in terms of grammar and nice description. However I have the feeling you're writing in circles and your main idea doesn't developpe at the end of the story.
ReplyDeleteI like the second paragraph, it is very descrptive and the reader can imagene how she is importante in your life. The text has a good structure and grammar.
ReplyDeleteI enjoy the second one is more creative the way as a recipe.
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